And step outside into the misty autumn.
A Writer’s Confession
After the great reception I got for yesterday’s “No Coffee” post, I wonder if I should label every one of my writings as “No Coffee”. Ok, I guess not — it’s perhaps a bit disingenuous to do so, like carving a ten-foot man out of gypsum and dirtying him up a bit and saying you dug him up in your backyard.
To be genuine, I have to confess some things:
- Sometimes, I daydream about getting published and critics remarking that I have Something to Say. In reality, getting an agent is one struggle, getting published is another, people even reading what you have to say is yet another.
- I don’t want to get published badly enough that I want to write with a commercial sales end in mind. I don’t have to support myself with my books, and I don’t want to write for the market. For those who read in the SF/F genre, I want to be Ursula LeGuin, not Laurell K. Hamilton. There’s nothing wrong with the latter, but her books offer lots of gore and over-the-top (and I mean over-the-top) sex and not a lot of thinking. In other words, she writes for a mass paperback market that wants fast gratification. I’m not sure wanting people to think is necessarily a good thing, but I can’t write like Laurell K. Hamilton.
- I often doubt my ability to write. I wonder if my intros are catchy enough. I wonder if enough happens in my books. I never wonder about my characters, because I know that’s my strong point.
- I do often wonder, even if I’m not depressed, whether I will put writing down eventually. I have seven novels with two on the way, plus one or two non-fiction items. I’m currently feeling more rewarded by the seedlings in my basement — so far, a god-awful number of cardoon, so many that I can’t put all of them in my garden; the tomatoes/peppers/eggplant that were just planted; the moringa tree’s new shoots after I thought it had died; the seeds in peat moss in the refrigerator so they’ll sprout in a couple months. I plant them and am rewarded by visible growth. They live in the garden and feed my husband and I. Sometimes the plants fail, but it’s easy to learn how to keep them alive next time.
- We still have no coffee. Our bean order is coming in today, and if I’m really lucky, I’ll have time to make a pot at work (New Guinea, great for a press pot!) .
No coffee. No. Coffee.
A Writing Day
I think I’m ready to have a writing day at the local Corporate Coffee. I’m ambitious about it right now because it’s a Saturday and the only other thing I must do this weekend is plant a flat of tomatoes, peppers, and eggplant. I’m cautious about it because I’m on a new medication with the usual bevy of unusual possible side effects, and I’m still coming off the depression. But sometimes I fake it till I make it.
I’m going back to adapting/changing/editing Whose Hearts are Mountains. The concepts I get to play around with are: How do you survive undetected through centuries, even millennium, if you’re effectively immortal? What tradeoffs are there for effective immortality, higher physical capabilities, and the ability to talk to each other telepathically? How do you relate — if you do — to humans? What “tells” are there that might give you away? What if you were one of these mythical beings and you didn’t know it? How would you react if you find out? Most of this is character, not plot, which figures. I love my characters most of all.
I don’t know if I will send any more queries out, to be truthful. Or if I do, where will I send them, because I’ve gone at least halfway through the fantasy agent list with only rejections to show. I’m still not considering self-publication, because the irony is that if you’ve self-published, you won’t be able to get that book published mainstream. I’m reconciling myself with the possibility that the world doesn’t need my books. But I will write anyhow.
really, really short
What is my blog about?
I’ve noticed that the tone of this blog is not consistent. I originally set out writing about the craft of writing, writing the blog entries as I learned. I still write this way from time to time (yesterday’s post). I decided that I sounded a little didactic (i.e. like a professor teaching class), and I included personal writing examples in the analysis.
More or Less an Analysis
One of the things I wrestle too much with in my writing — am I telling the reader too little? Too much?
The first thing I think of is Chekhov’s Gun, the rule that if something is important to the plot, it should be introduced before it becomes important. My first segment, then, is a veritable Clue game (“Look! There’s the candlestick that Mr. Mustard will use to kill the deceased in the parlor!”), but is it too much? Or too little?
What do we know from yesterday’s post of the first segment (yesterday’s post)?
- Annie’s mother is a cultural anthropologist who supposedly told Annie odd bedtime stories when she was a child;
- Annie doesn’t remember her childhood;
- Annie has chosen to follow her steps, focusing on urban legends;
- Annie’s stepfather was/is a renowned cryptographer for the government, and kept possession of codes when he left his position and changed his identity;
- Annie dabbles in cryptology and inherits his cipher box and codes;
- Her parents die three months after that passage in a home invasion;
- An unknown time has passed, and Annie is remembering the incident.
- Are the items above too much for the first thousand words of a book? Should I put in more description so it doesn’t feel like an information dump?
- Have I given too little reference to time, so that I strand the readers in limbo and give them no clue as how the segment fits in the book?
- Does Annie not worry enough about coming into possession of what might be government secrets?
- Can I just leave Annie’s casual mention of not having childhood memories (a rare thing to not have any before a certain age) as something she just accepts, or do I have to explain more?
- And, most importantly, does this beginning make my readers want to read more of it?
The first baby step
Miraculously, I’m at a coffee shop editing the beginning of Whose Hearts are Mountains. This is how the book begins. I might have posted an earlier version earlier, but this has been tweaked. I’d love it if you let me know whether this is too random or weird to start a book with.
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Baby Steps Back
Right now, I’m considering going back to Whose Hearts are Mountains — not to finish it up yet, but to sit down and look at the 70,000 words I’ve already written to see how I can balance the travelogue through a post-Collapse United States with the protagonist’s personal reactions — and field notes, because Annie IS an anthropologist.
I also have to make it plausible that the myriad of “incidents” (i.e. attacks) Annie experiences could be random malfeasances rather than the signs of a plot by Free White State’s government to capture her. I’m covering this for the next book in their series. I have to make the dreams and hints hint only toward her identity as a half-human, half-preternatural creature rather than the conspiracy that will be in the next book.
I also should work on the mental health book, which is going to require some primary sources. I’m too much an academic to use the Cliff Notes of bipolar disorder, Bipolar Disorder for Dummies. (I kid you not. Not even a tiny bit.) Biological psychology and psychiatry articles don’t intimidate me that much — ok, biopsych intimidates me a bit — it’s just that there’s so much “We don’t know what causes bipolar, but neurotransmitters are involved somewhere” that I can read without my brain going numb.
Yes, this is a lot of work I’m doing for something that may just be for the fun of it, given my total failure to find a agent. I may take a friend’s advice and try for literary fiction agents but not right now, not while I’m fighting off depression. Part of me wonders if writing, or at least putting 85,000 words into a novel (and I’ve done that with six so far) is a waste of time if I can’t get published. I like my creations to have an audience and speak to people, just as knitters want their family and friends to appreciate the gifts of socks and hats.
This is my dilemma, the one I have to get a handle on before I write again.
Conversation with A Fictitious Author
I sat at an isolated seat in Starbucks sipping at a blonde espresso. My computer sat before me, unopened, as I wondered how to start writing again. I glanced up, and a man in his thirties, dressed like a professor in a red sweater and white Oxford shirt and jeans, strode toward me. He didn’t look like any of my colleagues, although as time passed, it seemed I knew fewer and fewer of them. This man could have blended into a faculty reception without notice — of middling height and slight build, myopic brown eyes behind round steel-rimmed glasses —
I recognized him as he sat down, and understood why nobody else noticed him. The wide, vaguely almond-shaped eyes crinkled when he smiled at me —
“I figured I’d find you here.” Josh Young, chronicler of the sociomagical experiment known as Barn Swallows’ Dance — and writer of magical realism to the outside world — peered at me. “How’s progress on the book?”
“Books,” I corrected. “Two fiction and one not-so-fiction.” I studied my paper cup of espresso. “They’re not going well. I’m having trouble getting back to writing after my latest round of rejections, but you wouldn’t know that.”
The New York Times bestselling writer, who had won that distinction by the time he was thirty, suddenly seemed a little taller and more substantial. Of course — it was his connection to the earth-soul Gaia, to the sprinkling of trees that grew outside the library Starbucks. Nobody else, again, noticed. “Do you know why I’ve had the success in getting published?” I heard leaves whisper in his tenor voice.
“Because you’re really good at writing?” I met his gaze and his challenge.
“Because you wrote me that way. Because you wrote me as someone who studied writing fiction and wrote literary fiction and sent it to literary fiction agents. You wrote me as someone who not only had great talent, but great luck.”
“I wrote you to be a better writer than me?” I stammered.
“I can’t be better than the person who’s writing me — you see?” Josh chuckled, a dry sound that reminded me of leaves again. “I will say, though, that you wrote some lofty aspirations for me. If this wasn’t fantasy, I’d get rejected just as much as you do. The idea is to tell your truth, and tell it over and over until someone listens.” Josh walked his fingers toward my espresso, and I tapped his hand with my spoon in warning.
“But what if no one listens?” I threw the rest of the quad espresso down my throat as if it were a shot of whiskey and slammed the paper cup on the table.
Josh raised his eyebrows and peered over his glasses at me. “Then that’s their problem, because if you don’t listen and discern, you don’t learn, you fail to adapt, and you die. The first law of nature.”
I remembered when Josh was a college student, a little more frail with spiked hair and bright t-shirts. This man, thirteen years later, was no less beautiful, but he had calmed from the black-clad, precocious poetry slam artist to an equally precocious, wry and weighty scholar. He glanced down at the table, breaking eye contact. “Yes?” I asked.
“There’s a question I need to ask.” He paused for a noticeable increment of time. “Will I outlive –“
I knew the end of that question, and why Josh wanted to know. The love of his life, Jeanne Beaumont-Young, was thirty years older than him, which I guessed made her about 63. Of course, I had written about the end of this committed couple’s life together.
“Jeanne will live an extremely long life,” I ventured slowly, “and she will outlive you, but by only six months.” I withheld his cause of death, an undetected aneurysm, because it would make no difference — the fatal defect would be inoperable.
Josh nodded. “You could have taken the easy way out and had us both die at the same time, or you could have made me wait twenty years.” He stood, shook my hand, and wandered off, looking like any other professor who frequented the campus Starbucks.
Soon, to my surprise, he returned, eyes twinkling, with another stout blond espresso. “Writers need their coffee,” he grinned, and faded into the crowded coffeehouse.
